My Short Japanese Speech?

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My Short Japanese Speech?

Postby Condraz23 » 2009-05-09, 6:45

I have to prepare a small speech on Japanese. I've written it all down and its all been double checked but since Japanese isn't my best subject, I think I might still have a few grammatical errors. Hopefully, it's all okay. Can somebody please check it to see if there aren't any errors?

Japanese: Konichiwa. Watashi no namae wa Condraz23 desu soshite jyuu roku sai desu. Nihongo ga jyozu ni naritakatta desu kara ichinen kanme Nihon ni sumimashita. Sukoshi kawatta koto wo shitakatta desu kara Ryukyu shyoto made ryokou shimashita. Ryukyu shyoto ni tsuite nagara, takusan nojou to ojiisan to obaasan wo miemashita keredomo nanari omoshiroku shiete iru koto ga arimasen. Roku satsu kanme kara, tsumaranakatta narimasu. Mata, Ryukyu hogen wa gakkou ni naratta Nihongo to onaji de wa arimasen kara taihen nigiyaka tokoro made ikitakatta desu. Nochihodo, watashitachi ga Sapporo ni kimashita. Sapporo wa Ryukyu shyoto yori totemo ookiikute takusan hitotachi ga iru tokoro desu ne.

Watashi no homesutei kazoku wa Ainu deshita. Otoko ga ookikute nagai hige ga motta shoshite onna no kao de "tattoo" ga atta. Sono hitotachi ga Ainu no dentouteki tabemono wo kudasaimashita. Tabete nagara, tabemono wo moratta hito ga mainichi kami ni inottemashita. Sore wa hen to omoimashita keredomo tabemono ga oishiikatta desu kara watashi ga ureshikatta desu. Hokkaido no yuumei na miso ramen mo tabemashita. Watashi no apaato de Sapporo Terebi to wo miemashita. Nihon wa Nyuu Jiraando yori totemo ookikute nigiyaka desu. Nihon ni ichinenkanme sunde kara, watashi no nihongo ga taihen ii naratta to omoimasu. Moshimo anata mo watashi yoo na Nihongo ga jyozu ni naritakatta naraba, Nihon ni hayaku ikanakereba narimasen.

English translation: My name is Condraz23 and I am sixteen years old. I wanted to become good at Japanese so I lived in Japan for about one year. I wanted to do something a bit different so I traveled to the Ryukyu Islands. After I arrived at the Ryukyu Islands, I was able to see many farms and old people but there were no interesting things that I could do. After six months, I became bored. Also, the Ryukyu dialect was not the same as the Japanese I learned at school so I wanted to go to a very lively place. Later on, we arrived at Sapporo. Compared to the Ryukyu Islands, Sapporo is very large and it is a place with many people, isn't it?

My homstay family were Ainus. The men had big, long beards and the women's faces had tattoos. Those people gave me traditional Ainu food. After eating, the person who gave me food prayed to the gods everyday. I thought that was odd but the food was delicious so I was happy. I ate Hokkaido's famous miso ramen too. From my apartment, I could see the Sapporo TV Tower. Compared to New Zealand, Japan is very big and lively. After living in Japan for one year, I think my Japanese has become very good. If you want to become good at Japanese like me, you must quickly go to Japan.

Also, what's the difference between agemasu, kudasaimasu, and moraimasu? Thanks.

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Re: My Short Japanese Speech?

Postby hashi » 2009-05-09, 7:07

Condraz23 wrote:Japanese: Konichiwa. Watashi no namae wa Condraz23 desu. soshite jyuu roku sai desu. Nihongo ga jyozu ni naritakatta desu kara ichinen kanme Nihon ni sumimashita. Sukoshi kawatta koto wo shitakatta desu kara Ryukyu shyoto made ryokou shimashita. Ryukyu shyoto ni tsuite nagara kara, takusan nojou to ojiisan to obaasan wo miemashita keredomo nanari amari omoshiroku shiete iru koto ga arimasen. Roku satsu kanme rokkagetsukanme kara, tsumaranakukatta narimashitasu. Mata, Ryukyu hogen wa gakkou ni naratta Nihongo to onaji de wa arimasen kara taihen deshita. nigiyaka na tokoro made ni ikitakatta desu. Nochihodo, watashitachi ga Sapporo ni ikimashita. Sapporo wa Ryukyu shyoto yori totemo ookiikute takusan hitotachi ga iru tokoro desu ne.

Watashi no homesutei kazoku wa Ainu deshita. Otoko ga ookikute nagai hige ga mottachimashita. shoshite onna no kao de "tattoo" ga arimashita. Sono hitotachi ga Ainu no dentouteki tabemono wo kudasaimashita. Tabete nagara kara, tabemono wo moratta hito ga mainichi kami ni inottemashita. Sore wa hen to omoimashita keredomo tabemono ga oishiikatta desu kara watashi ga ureshikatta desu. Hokkaido no yuumei na miso ramen mo tabemashita. Watashi no apaato de Sapporo Terebi to wo miemashita. Nihon wa Nyuu Jiraando yori totemo ookikute nigiyaka desu. Nihon ni ichinenkanme sunde kara, watashi no nihongo ga taihen totemo ii yoku naratta to omoimasu. Moshimo anata mo watashi yoo na Nihongo ga jyozu ni naritakatta naraba, Nihon ni hayaku ikanakereba narimasen.


Yay. It's good to see another New Zealander on here :D

You're Japanese is pretty good, the major issue was consistancy with plain form or -masu.

- nagara = while
- -me gives it ordinality. Rokkagetsukanme = The 6th month, in some places it's ok, but not others.

Any other questions, just ask. I'm not perfect at Japanese, this is just my opinion

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Re: My Short Japanese Speech?

Postby Condraz23 » 2009-05-09, 7:15

Wow, thanks for the quick reply.

THose corrections will come in handy... Plus, I've got until Wednesday to prepare. :) :)

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Re: My Short Japanese Speech?

Postby hashi » 2009-05-09, 7:25

Condraz23 wrote:Wow, thanks for the quick reply.

THose corrections will come in handy... Plus, I've got until Wednesday to prepare. :) :)


Haha no problem. In your speech it says you're 16, but your profile says 24... Are you doing this speech for NCEA?

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Re: My Short Japanese Speech?

Postby AdiJapan » 2009-05-09, 11:54

My correction:

Konnichiwa. Watashi no namae wa Condraz23 desu. soshite Juu roku sai desu. Nihongo ga jouzu ni naritakatta no de, ichinen kan me Nihon ni sumimashita. Sukoshi kawatta koto wo shitakatta no de, Ryuukyuu shotou made ni ryokou shimashita. Ryuukyuu shotou ni wa tsuite nagara, takusan noujou ya ojiisan to obaasan ga takusan mieta kedo, nanari amari omoshiroi shiete iru koto wa arimasen deshita. Roku gatsu kan me kara, tsumaranakatta narimasu desu. Mata, Ryuukyuu hougen wa gakkou ni de naratta Nihongo to onaji de wa arimasen kara nakatta no de taihen mou sukoshi nigiyaka na tokoro made ni ikitakatta desu. [The logic of the preceding statement is not clear.] Nochihodo Soshite, watashitachi ga Sapporo ni kimashita. Sapporo wa Ryuukyuu shotou yori totemo ookiikute hito ga takusan hitotachi ga iru tokoro desu ne.

Watashi no Houmusutei kazoku wa Ainu deshita. Otoko no hito ga wa ookikute nagai hige ga motta shoshite o shite ite, onna no hito no wa kao de ni "tattoo" ga atta irezumi o shite imashita. Sono hitotachi (kazoku?) ga wa Ainu no dentouteki na tabemono o kudasaimashita ("kuremashita" is more usual). Mainichi, tabe owattara, tabemono o moratta hito ga wa mainichi kami ni inotte imashita. Sore wa hen ("hen" would be impolite here) fushigi da to omotta kedo, tabemono ga oishikatta desu kara no de watashi ga ureshikatta desu. Hokkaidou no yuumei na miso raamen mo tabemashita. Watashi no Apaato de kara Sapporo Terebi tou wo ga miete imashita. Nihon wa Nyuu Jiirando yori totemo ookikute nigiyaka desu. Ichi nen kan me Nihon ni sunde kara, watashi no yoku nihongo ga taihen ii naratta hanaseru you ni natta to omoimasu. Moshi anata (anatatachi?) mo watashi no you ni Nihongo ga jouzu ni naritakereba [this is a rather un-Japanese lack of modesty], Nihon ni hayaku ikanakereba narimasen itta hou ga ii to omoimasu.

Condraz23 wrote:Also, what's the difference between agemasu, kudasaimasu, and moraimasu?


Ageru = I give (to someone)
Kureru = (someone) gives me
Morau = I, you, etc. receive

These verbs have more polite versions:

Ageru -> sashiageru (humble: I bow and offer you)
Kureru -> kudasaru (honorific: You are so generous as to give me)
Morau -> itadaku (humble: I might not deserve to receive)
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Re: My Short Japanese Speech?

Postby hashi » 2009-05-09, 14:05

You've been really picky on spelling like correcting jyozu to jouzu. Spelling isn't too important for a speech, so long as he's got the pronounciation correct.

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Re: My Short Japanese Speech?

Postby AdiJapan » 2009-05-09, 17:07

mrhashimoto wrote:You've been really picky on spelling like correcting jyozu to jouzu. Spelling isn't too important for a speech, so long as he's got the pronounciation correct.

But that's exactly the point: he didn't get his pronunciation right, since jozu and jouzu are pronounced differently by Japanese natives. I know all very well that confusing long and short vowels is a very usual mistake English native speakers make.

Also, jyo may be accepted as a keyboard input for じょ, but does not belong to any romanization standard. It's either jo or zyo.

And yes, I tend to be picky. I'm sorry, I can't change that.
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Re: My Short Japanese Speech?

Postby gyrus » 2009-05-23, 18:34

It's funny, I always use Hepburn romanization for transliterating things that will be read, but the other system (the one that uses zyo) when inputting Japanese.
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Re: My Short Japanese Speech?

Postby AdiJapan » 2009-05-24, 14:28

gyrus wrote:It's funny, I always use Hepburn romanization for transliterating things that will be read, but the other system (the one that uses zyo) when inputting Japanese.

That's quite understandable. Hepburn is good for allowing foreigners to best approximate the Japanese pronunciation. Nihon-shiki follows the Japanese phonology, that is, the way natives perceive the sounds, so it's better for those people who internalize the Japanese sounds and the way they relate to each other. For example, an English native thinks that the best way to write ち is chi, but this romanization hides the relation ち has with たてと etc. Someone who "feels" that relation will naturally write ち as ti.
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Re: My Short Japanese Speech?

Postby Condraz23 » 2009-07-16, 15:39

mrhashimoto wrote:
Condraz23 wrote:Wow, thanks for the quick reply.

THose corrections will come in handy... Plus, I've got until Wednesday to prepare. :) :)


Haha no problem. In your speech it says you're 16, but your profile says 24... Are you doing this speech for NCEA?


Yeah, it was for an NCEA internal. The results came back last week and I got a Merit (which is roughly equivalent to a B using the American system). I'm very proud of it.

AdiJapan wrote:My correction:

Konnichiwa. Watashi no namae wa Condraz23 desu. soshite Juu roku sai desu. Nihongo ga jouzu ni naritakatta no de, ichinen kan me Nihon ni sumimashita. Sukoshi kawatta koto wo shitakatta no de, Ryuukyuu shotou made ni ryokou shimashita. Ryuukyuu shotou ni wa tsuite nagara, takusan noujou ya ojiisan to obaasan ga takusan mieta kedo, nanari amari omoshiroi shiete iru koto wa arimasen deshita. Roku gatsu kan me kara, tsumaranakatta narimasu desu. Mata, Ryuukyuu hougen wa gakkou ni de naratta Nihongo to onaji de wa arimasen kara nakatta no de taihen mou sukoshi nigiyaka na tokoro made ni ikitakatta desu. [The logic of the preceding statement is not clear.] Nochihodo Soshite, watashitachi ga Sapporo ni kimashita. Sapporo wa Ryuukyuu shotou yori totemo ookiikute hito ga takusan hitotachi ga iru tokoro desu ne.

Watashi no Houmusutei kazoku wa Ainu deshita. Otoko no hito ga wa ookikute nagai hige ga motta shoshite o shite ite, onna no hito no wa kao de ni "tattoo" ga atta irezumi o shite imashita. Sono hitotachi (kazoku?) ga wa Ainu no dentouteki na tabemono o kudasaimashita ("kuremashita" is more usual). Mainichi, tabe owattara, tabemono o moratta hito ga wa mainichi kami ni inotte imashita. Sore wa hen ("hen" would be impolite here) fushigi da to omotta kedo, tabemono ga oishikatta desu kara no de watashi ga ureshikatta desu. Hokkaidou no yuumei na miso raamen mo tabemashita. Watashi no Apaato de kara Sapporo Terebi tou wo ga miete imashita. Nihon wa Nyuu Jiirando yori totemo ookikute nigiyaka desu. Ichi nen kan me Nihon ni sunde kara, watashi no yoku nihongo ga taihen ii naratta hanaseru you ni natta to omoimasu. Moshi anata (anatatachi?) mo watashi no you ni Nihongo ga jouzu ni naritakereba [this is a rather un-Japanese lack of modesty], Nihon ni hayaku ikanakereba narimasen itta hou ga ii to omoimasu.

Condraz23 wrote:Also, what's the difference between agemasu, kudasaimasu, and moraimasu?


Ageru = I give (to someone)
Kureru = (someone) gives me
Morau = I, you, etc. receive

These verbs have more polite versions:

Ageru -> sashiageru (humble: I bow and offer you)
Kureru -> kudasaru (honorific: You are so generous as to give me)
Morau -> itadaku (humble: I might not deserve to receive)


Thanks, those corrections were very useful.

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Re: My Short Japanese Speech?

Postby hashi » 2009-07-17, 0:08

Condraz23 wrote:
mrhashimoto wrote:
Condraz23 wrote:Wow, thanks for the quick reply.

THose corrections will come in handy... Plus, I've got until Wednesday to prepare. :) :)


Haha no problem. In your speech it says you're 16, but your profile says 24... Are you doing this speech for NCEA?


Yeah, it was for an NCEA internal. The results came back last week and I got a Merit (which is roughly equivalent to a B using the American system). I'm very proud of it.



Haha well done :) I always got Excellence for mine cause my teacher loved me :)

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Re: My Short Japanese Speech?

Postby Luan.tt » 2018-02-09, 21:29

Could I see your speech. Is it a jikoshoukai?


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