[Game] Creating sentences

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Re: [Game] Creating sentences

Postby Osias » 2019-12-17, 1:34

I've never had a bagel.
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Re: [Game] Creating sentences

Postby Synalepha » 2019-12-17, 7:26

I crossed the city and then a marshland unil I reached a morose outback. The curlicued finials of the temple where looming through the fog. The temple, a sanctum cordoned off from the rest of the world by gilt walls and battlements, was surrrounded by fields of ragweed, tarweed and sorrel in which blowsy sharecroppers and other pissants would work till dusk. The temple was the oddest building I had ever seen, so imposing and queerly designed.

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Re: [Game] Creating sentences

Postby azhong » 2019-12-17, 15:02

No small number of these whaling seamen belong to the Azores, where the outward-bound Nantucket whalers frequently touch to augment their crews from the hardy peasants of those Rocky shores.
(Excerpted from Ch27, Moby Dick)

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Re: [Game] Creating sentences

Postby Synalepha » 2019-12-17, 17:10

I wrote "pissant" but ok.

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The nave of the temple was unfathomably long, the storiated clerestories were as tall as the eye could see. Everything was bedecked with a panoply of motley arabesques and millefleurs that augmented one's sense of ecstasy. In the apse, the swoony high priest was chanting lilting litanies to the Whippoorwill God. The entire scenery was mantled with ghastly darkness.

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Re: [Game] Creating sentences

Postby Dormouse559 » 2019-12-17, 18:06

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I'm guessing that's what's missing.

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I don't recognize the term "swing deck", and I can't find it online.
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There are other ways of correcting this sentence. The main thing is you can't have "mythology that [something]".

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Or "is shorter than that of a turtle".

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Synalepha wrote:I crossed the city and then a marshland unil I reached a morose outback. The curlicued finials of the temple where looming through the fog. The temple, a sanctum cordoned off from the rest of the world by gilt walls and battlements, was surrrounded by fields of ragweed, tarweed and sorrel in which blowsy sharecroppers and other pissants would work till dusk. The temple was the oddest building I had ever seen, so imposing and queerly designed.

Synalepha wrote:The nave of the temple was unfathomably long, the storiated clerestories were as tall as the eye could see. Everything was bedecked with a panoply of motley arabesques and millefleurs that augmented one's sense of ecstasy. In the apse, the swoony high priest was chanting lilting litanies to the Whippoorwill God. The entire scenery was mantled with ghastly darkness.

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There comes a point where prose is too flowery to correct, at least from an English-learning perspective. You might submit these to the members of your university creative writing seminar for critique.
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Re: [Game] Creating sentences

Postby Synalepha » 2019-12-17, 20:54

It's ok if you don't want to correct them. I'm just trying to create these flowery sentences in order to have a bunch of difficult words better cemented in my brain.

Dormouse559 wrote:You might submit these to the members of your university creative writing seminar for critique.


Aww :blush:

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Re: [Game] Creating sentences

Postby Osias » 2019-12-18, 1:56

Synalepha wrote:The main thing is you can't have "mythology that [something]"

It was actually the parody that had such character. Maybe I simply missed a "had" or "got".
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Re: [Game] Creating sentences

Postby Synalepha » 2019-12-18, 6:26

Osias wrote:
Synalepha wrote:The main thing is you can't have "mythology that [something]"



I'm pretty sure I never wrote that.

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Re: [Game] Creating sentences

Postby tiuwiu » 2019-12-18, 15:49

Synalepha wrote:The nave of the temple was unfathomably long, the storiated clerestories were as tall as the eye could see.


"Why does it still take so long until Santa Claus finally comes?" asked the little child and pouted before she opened the 18 door of the advent calendar.
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Re: [Game] Creating sentences

Postby linguoboy » 2019-12-18, 15:57

tiuwiu wrote:"Why does it still take so long until Santa Claus finally comes?" asked the little child and pouted before she opened the 18 door of the advent calendar.

You could say it that way, but "door 18", "door number 18", or "the 18th door" would all be more idiomatic.
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Re: [Game] Creating sentences

Postby Osias » 2019-12-19, 0:20

Synalepha wrote:
Osias wrote:
Synalepha wrote:The main thing is you can't have "mythology that [something]"



I'm pretty sure I never wrote that.

I'm sorry. I'll try no to quote people on the phone again.
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Re: [Game] Creating sentences

Postby france-eesti » 2019-12-19, 10:24

tiuwiu wrote:"Why does it still take so long until Santa Claus finally comes?" asked the little child and pouted before she opened the 18 door of the advent calendar.


Be careful, Tony, if you're not good enough, Santa Claus will give your Harry Potter chess set to another child, somewhere in Russia or in Ukraine.
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Re: [Game] Creating sentences

Postby Osias » 2019-12-22, 0:18

It amazes me that people we used to think as smart today defend Trump and say he's playing 4 dimensional chess.
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Re: [Game] Creating sentences

Postby france-eesti » 2019-12-22, 12:22

Three-dimensional is so obsolete right now - you should really get back on track and live in the four-dimensional version of life - you'll only feel more powerful.
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Re: [Game] Creating sentences

Postby Osias » 2019-12-22, 12:54

Workers of world, unite! You have nothing to lose but becoming obsolete.
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Re: [Game] Creating sentences

Postby france-eesti » 2019-12-22, 14:16

United Colors of Benetton... has anyone ever heard such a ridiculous slogan?
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Re: [Game] Creating sentences

Postby tiuwiu » 2019-12-23, 6:45

No, but most marketing slogans are ridiculous only a few are very catchy and creative.
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Re: [Game] Creating sentences

Postby france-eesti » 2019-12-24, 7:17

Another bunch of flowers, really, Juno, can't you be a little more creative than the years before, what's wrong with that miniature clarinet we saw in that charity shop?
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Re: [Game] Creating sentences

Postby Dormouse559 » 2019-12-24, 19:14

Synalepha wrote:It's ok if you don't want to correct them. I'm just trying to create these flowery sentences in order to have a bunch of difficult words better cemented in my brain.

Fair enough :)

Osias wrote:
The main thing is you can't have "mythology that [something]"

It was actually the parody that had such character that characteristic. Maybe I simply missed a "had" or "got".

In that case, I'd say "where", or if you're feeling formal "in which".

Osias wrote:It amazes me that people we used to think of as smart today defend Trump and say he's playing 4 dimensional chess.

Osias wrote:Workers of the world, unite! You have nothing to lose but becoming obsolete.

The orange text sounds a bit clunky here; a full noun would work better than a gerund. If I'm understanding what you meant correctly, maybe "your own obsolescence".

tiuwiu wrote:No, but most marketing slogans are ridiculous, only a few are very catchy and creative.

Don't normally comment on punctuation since it's kind of squishy, but I'd say you should put at least a comma after "ridiculous". In formal settings, you'd need to use a semicolon or period.

france-eesti wrote:Another bunch of flowers, really, Juno, can't you be a little more creative than the years before (you've been in) previous years, what's wrong with that miniature clarinet we saw in that charity shop?

I would replace the comma before "what's" with a question mark.

There is little about a well-made clarinet that cannot be improved upon by a cheap oboe.*

* Is kidding and knows nothing about clarinets or oboes
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Re: [Game] Creating sentences

Postby Osias » 2019-12-25, 14:12

Dormouse559 wrote:It was actually the parody that had such character that characteristic


I once read a comic book called Horus, Lord of the Light. The comic book was a parody of Marvel's Thor. The comic book had this guy, Horus. Horus was a character. Horus had to steer the solar system. The book was based on the Egyptian mythology. Loosely. Just like Marvel's Thor is "based" on Norse mythology.

Dormouse559 wrote:If I'm understanding what you meant correctly, maybe "your own obsolescence".

Yes. :yep:
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